GoodDeal Brand Flashlight

Title: GoodDeal Brand Flashlight
Keywords: multipurpose flashlight, GoodDeal flashlight

Features:

Waterproof
55 lumens of light output
Uses 3 AA batteries

1. Original text:

Stay awear of your suroundings in any whether with a GoodDeal flashlight. This product is made to shine light so you can see. Made of durability materials, this waterproof and multipurpose flash-light is suitable for use in a variety of of conditions and situations, including rain, snow, and sleet. It shines its light up to 25,000 feet, and can be an ideal gift for anyone from a student graduating high school to a mechanic who likes to work at the night. It offers a powerful output of 45 lumens and uses 3 AAA batteries.

2. Revised or edited text:

Stay clear of your surroundings with a GoodDeal flashlight. This multipurpose flashlight is made from durable materials, is waterproof, and is suitable for use in a variety of situations and weather conditions including rain and snow. It shines up to 25,000 feet and can be an ideal gift for anyone, from students to mechanics who like to work at night. It offers a powerful output of 55 lumens and uses 3 AA batteries.

3. Feedback (what was good, what was fixed, what are the other issues in the piece?):

Your content is good and informative, however, there were several typos, misspellings, and grammatical lapses in your copy. I fixed them in order to make your piece more clear and effective. In particular, I changed several words that had typo errors. I also removed unnecessary terms and extra commas. Some of the features were not accurate, such as the light output of 55 lumens (you wrote 45 lumens) and the size of the batteries (AA, not AAA) so I edited them also.

Advertisements